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Friday, 4 September 2015

Shriya's Narrative

7 comments:

  1. Feed froward Shriya, remember to re-read and edit your story so it makes sense.

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  2. Nice story but just remember to edit it properly next time because there were a few mistakes in their. (I liked the scary noises)

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  3. I liked your story but maybe give a bit more detail and re-read your story.

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  4. cool story just little mistakes needed fixing otherwise awesome.

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  5. cool story but you need to re read your stories there are many mistakes
    Where you have rocky slade in her description you put rose.
    please go back and fix it

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  6. cool story but you need to re read your stories there are many mistakes
    Where you have rocky slade in her description you put rose.
    please go back and fix it

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  7. Really cool story Shriya. I liked how your story has set in an haunted house with celebrity's. My feed forward is that you should edit your work and make sure it makes sense, but still it is a pretty cool story.

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